"Good little witch" Once upon a time, in a small village tucked away in the depths of a mystical forest, lived a young girl named Lily. She was no ordinary girl; she was a good little witch. Every day, she would spend her time studying spells, brewing potions, and exploring the wonders of nature. Lily was known for her kindness and compassion. She would use her magical abilities to help those in need. Whether it was mending a broken heart, healing a wounded animal, or bringing joy to a sad child, Lily would always lend a helping hand.
This is a good story. I enjoyed it as a palate cleanser between larger novels. It has strong worldbuilding, pacing and plot. I thought the characters were pleasant to read, but a bit blank slates. I hope there's a series following this book, this setting and characters are interesting.
I wouldn t have had so much of a problem with this if I were more invested in the characters and their stories, but other than the occasional bit of snappy dialogue, they too were devoid of charisma for a bunch of legends with historical significance and awesome powers, they were dull to follow. This standalone epic fantasy novel begins with the demon Kai awakening outside his body, not knowing what happened or how he got there only that his old body appears to have been dead for about a year and one of his closest friends is imprisoned nearby.
Whether it was mending a broken heart, healing a wounded animal, or bringing joy to a sad child, Lily would always lend a helping hand. She would often visit the village market, where she would sell her enchanted herbs, healing salves, and magical trinkets. The villagers adored her and would flock to her stall, eager to acquire a little bit of her magic.
A Critique of 'Witch King' by Martha Wells
I got a copy of this audiobook for free from the publisher for the purpose of an honest review.
This book was fun! If I were to describe this book, it's a combination of Carol Berg's Rai-Kirah series and Steven Erikson's Malazan series. This book stars the eponymous Witch King Kai, in two timelines. In the past, he leads a rebellion against oppressive death wizards. In the present, he's trying to discover who betrayed him.
While this book didn't knock my socks off, I do think this book will end up in the top 10 books I read this year. I suggest you read this book, but enter reading this with your expectations relatively in check. This book isn't as spectacular a start to a series as Murderbot.
WHAT IS THE TARGET AUDIENCE? WHAT GENRES? WHAT MAJOR TROPES?
- Adult, but I think anyone older than 14 can read this.
- Demon protagonist who jumps between bodies
- Life-energy and death magic
- Dual timeline, past and present. Friends in the past are potentially enemies in the present
- Non-European inspired setting. (I think I remember the characters eating teff, so I think this is loosely inspired by a central African setting? I could be remembering it wrong.)
MY EMOTIONAL RESPONSE/FUN FACTOR
I had fun reading this, and I read it quickly. This book throws you right into the plot, with minimal exposition explaining worldbuilding. I enjoyed it as a relatively short pallet cleanser novel (432 pages or 13 hours audiobook) to read between bigger books. It was well written, it's prose lush, it was sharply paced, and the worldbuilding was enthralling.
If I were to make a complaint about this book, this felt like book 2 in a series. Specifically, we didn't get to know the characters like you usually do with book 1 in a series. I finished the book and the characters felt somewhat like strangers.
My favorite part of the book was the lived-in feeling of the setting and how the two timelines interacted with one another. In the past, Kai seems like a much more innocent person than he does in the present. In the past, we see the heroes interacting with one another as friends, but in the present the heroes treat one another with suspicion because they were betrayed by one of their number and they don't know who the betrayer is.
WARNING! QUIT READING NOW UNTIL YOU FINISH READING THE BOOK!
BIASES STATED
To put this review/study in proper context, you must know my starting point.
I've read a few of this author's books and stories before. I read book 1 of Raksura, and didn't love it. I read the first Murderbot book, and enjoyed it. I read some of the author's MtG IP fiction, and thought she did a fine job.
I also read a handful of reviews for 'Witch King', and I'm grateful that I did. I enjoyed this novel all the more because this book exceeded the expectations those reviews left me with. This was a good book after all.
SIMILAR BOOKS/OTHER BOOKS IN THE SERIES
- ‘Transformation’ by Carol Berg
- ‘Malazan: ‘The Gardens of the Moon” Book Review
- ‘The Curse of Chalion’ by Lois McMaster Bujold
CONCEPT AND EXECUTION
This book's concept was as a dual-timeline narrative, with the heroes in the past teaming up to defeat a great evil, while in the present they are at one another's throats. To summarize, the heroes defeated the Dark Lord(s) in the past timeline, and in the present timeline the heroes replaced the Dark Lord(s) and now squabble over the rubble of the Lord's kingdom. In the present, the book begins with Kai escaping a prison a past-friend trapped him in, and Kai has no idea which past-friend put him there. All he knows is that he's going to get revenge. This was a great concept.
This book was well executed upon, but it could have been better. I don't say this very often, but this book could have been a good 70~100 pages longer. I wanted to spend more time with these characters, I wanted to see more of the magic, I wanted to explore this world and it's civilizations more. I feel like the dual-timeline narrative resulted in us not having enough of either timeline. This is a good problem to have; it's usually good to leave the reader wanting more.
CHARACTERS, CHARACTERIZATION AND DIALOG
This is the weakest part of this story. As I said above, I finished this book and the protagonists were still basically strangers to me. This book was very plot-forward. We never saw the protagonists in contexts outside of moving the plot forward. This book was all business, no pleasure.
Everything the characters do was meant to advance the plot, and it gave both timelines a frenetic energy. But this fast pacing deprived the book of a slower, more nuanced characterization of the protagonists. I left this book understanding the events surrounding Kai, but not understanding who Kai is. Does he like tea? What's his favorite book? What's his favorite color? These questions are individually unimportant, but they hint at a greater truth; this book was stripped to the bone to provide a lean story without any 'fluff.' Consequently Kai, and everyone else, are somewhat enigmas. Some fluff is good!
To be clear, these aren't bad characters; I found Kai to be compelling. They just weren't developed here. I hope this book gets a sequel, I want to get more from this series.
PACING AND STRUCTURE
And this is arguably this book's strongest aspect. This book is FAST PACED. As stated, this book has frenetic energy. It's FAST PACED, and eminently readable. I found this book as easy to consume as crackers or candy or chocolate.
Structurally, here's a breakdown.
- With his family on the grasslands
- In captivity before the rebellion
- the rebellion
- Fleeing the palace of the hierarchs, and becoming fast friends
- Waking up in his tomb, and stealing a new body
- Freeing the whale and talking to grandma
- Stealing the boat, and speaking with the Blessed Immortal
- Returning to where he was held in captivity decades before
- Fight scenes with the conspiracy
- Returning to civilization, and finding the true traitor
On a chapter-by-chapter level, the author integrated the two timelines by going a chapter in the past, then the present, then the past again. This strategy worked, but I think it wasn't ideal. I felt a tiny bit of friction whenever the story alternated between chapters and timelines, between past and present. Whenever we change chapters/timelines, it took me a moment to remember what the plotline was in this different timeline. Having this source of friction happen at the beginning of every chapter wasn't a big deal, but it did hamper my suspension of disbelief somewhat.
I personally feel it would have been better if the story batched together several chapters in the past, then several chapters in the present, then back to the past. That would have relieved that narrative friction.
PLOT, STAKES AND TENSION
No spoilers about the plot. I thought the plot was very well done.
The stakes and tension worked REALLY WELL in the past. Kai was young and unskilled and innocent in the past, and he had a lot more to lose in the past. Due to his weakness and having so much to lose, the past felt much more serious and dangerous than the present. That's great stakes and tension. The stakes and tension in the present wasn't as well established as it was in the past.
AUTHORIAL VOICE (TONE, PROSE AND THEME)
I enjoyed the author's narrative voice. I like books which have a somewhat lush, descriptive style, focusing on the texture of life. For example, describing what a flower smells like, or what food tastes like. This book is such a story, describing everything from food to the art on the walls to people's clothing. Now that said, the lush style never delved into being purple.
The story's tone was serious, but never delved into being grimdark. The main bad guys uses death magic which kills a ton of people at a time, however that's the limit of it. There's no gore, or assault, or anything grim like that.
SETTING, WORLDBUILDING AND ORIGINALITY
The setting was lush, with multiple magic systems interacting with multiple cultures. The grasslands culture uses demons like Kai, there are witches who use elemental magics, the Immortal Blessed culture create magical artifacts, while the antagonist hierarchs use death magic. This was really good worldbuiling by the author, because it gave the different cultures a different texture for worldbuilding each; by getting to know the magic systems, you get to know the culture behind each one.
For example, the Blessed culture view themselves as pious and righteous due to the divine nature of their magic, but everyone else views their culture as pretentious and annoying due to how snooty their are. Another example would be demon magic; other cultures view the grassland culture as evil because they consort with demons, however the grassland culture view demons as something like Unseelie fairies- useful and dangerous, and you can marry them and form alliances with them.
Additionally, the setting isn't just a re-creation of earth. Some of the animals are NOT earth animals, like the massive wallwalkers who are domesticated beasts of burden (which sometimes eat people) or the Frankenstein-like ghoul creatures the blood magic sorcerers can create. And the characters wear non-earth clothing, like the veils the magic-user wear or the golden robes of the magically powerful hierarchs.
AUDIOBOOK NOTES
I listened to the audiobook, and it was great. The protagonist is the 'Witch King' mention in the title. I felt that the narrator did a good job of adding a bit of regal dignity to the narration. If this book sounds good to you, try out the audiobook, the narrator is Eric Mok.
LESSONS LEARNED
As an author, I want to improve my own writing/editing skills. To that end, I like to learn lessons from every story I read. Here's what I learned from this story:
- Link up your fantasy worldbuilding of magic with culture. For example, in this book the Immortal Blessed culture used divine magic to create magical artifacts. They view themselves as the natural rulers of the world, and consider themselves pious and just. Everyone else thinks of them as faux-rightous oppressors. This is GREAT worldbuilding, linking culture to magic to characters.
- This was a dual-timeline novel, and it divvied up the timeline by going chapter 1:present, then chapter 2: past, then 3:present, and so on/so forth. I think this strategy wasn't as good as bundling chapters into larger sections. For example, chapters 1 through 4: present, chapters 5 through 8:past, chapters 9 through 12: present.
Here's a link to all the lessons I've previously learned.
SUMMARY
This is a good story. I enjoyed it as a palate cleanser between larger novels. It has strong worldbuilding, pacing and plot. I thought the characters were pleasant to read, but a bit blank slates. I hope there's a series following this book, this setting and characters are interesting.
Did you like this critique/review? Here are some more: The Rest of My In Depth Reviews
On a personal note, I'm open to editing books. I don't like putting myself out here like this, but I've been told I should. Check my blog for details if interested.
From the breakout SFF superstar author of Murderbot comes a remarkable story of power and friendship, of trust and betrayal, and of the families we choose.
They knew that whatever she created would be crafted with love and care. Lily's magical abilities were not limited to just healing and comfort. She could also control the elements of nature and communicate with animals. The birds would flock to her, singing their sweet melodies, and the flowers would bloom when she walked by. The villagers regarded her as a guardian of their land, a protector of all things good and pure. But being a good little witch was not always easy. There were times when Lily faced challenges and temptations. Dark forces from beyond the forest would often try to lure her towards the path of darkness. They yearned for her powers, hoping to corrupt her innocence. However, Lily remained steadfast in her beliefs. She knew that her magic could only be used for good, and she would never succumb to the temptations of evil. She stood tall and strong, always choosing love over hate, light over darkness. As the years went by, Lily's reputation as a good little witch grew far and wide. People from distant lands would travel to seek her counsel and guidance. They would leave her presence with their hearts filled with hope and their spirits renewed. Lily's legacy as a good little witch lives on to this day. She became a symbol of goodness and magic, reminding everyone that even in the darkest of times, there is always a little light to guide us forward. Her story serves as a reminder that true power lies in kindness and compassion – a lesson that we can all carry with us. In conclusion, Lily, the good little witch, taught us the importance of using our powers for good and to always choose love over hate. Her story continues to inspire generations, reminding us that even in a world filled with darkness, there is always a little magic to be found..
Reviews for "Finding Harmony: Balancing Goodness and Witchcraft"
1. Rebecca - 1/5 stars - I really did not enjoy "Good Little Witch" at all. The story felt predictable and cliché, with no originality or depth. The characters were one-dimensional, and I found it impossible to connect or empathize with any of them. Additionally, the writing style was awkward and lacking in finesse. Overall, I was disappointed with this book and would not recommend it to others.
2. Andrew - 2/5 stars - While "Good Little Witch" had an interesting concept, I found that the execution was poorly done. The plot was disjointed and confusing, with too many unnecessary subplots that added little to the overall story. The pacing was also off, as some scenes felt rushed while others dragged on for too long. The dialogue was bland and lacked emotion, making it difficult to become invested in the characters or their relationships. Overall, I found this book to be lackluster and was left wanting more substance.
3. Jessica - 1/5 stars - I have to say that "Good Little Witch" was a complete waste of my time. The story was predictable and unoriginal, following the same tired tropes that have been used in countless other fantasy novels. The characters were flat and lacked any real development, making it impossible for me to care about what happened to them. The writing itself was mediocre, with awkward sentence structures and a lack of descriptive language. I would not recommend this book to anyone looking for a captivating and engaging read.